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Last Night XX opinion pls XX by ~chrissie-ness:iconchrissie-ness:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Song


Last night, didn't we have fun together?
Last night, we did have fun.
Baby, don't we have a lot of secrets?
Honey, we should tell.

*chorus
But, this is our first,
We could've shout out to the world!
Too scared to tell, but it doesn't really matter right now,
Maybe, we can cherish this for a while.

*not done yet XD*
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maybe i should just ask you guys if this is ok? like the lyrics? =P and stuff..lolz XD

i need opinions, please? XD thank you! =)
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~Fresh-Eye-Candy:iconFresh-Eye-Candy: Jun 5, 2008, 8:10:14 AM
I like it a lot.

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~chrissie-ness:iconchrissie-ness: Jun 5, 2008, 10:05:21 AM
why thank you :XD: i wish i can keep writing and still make it real good...yeah =P

thank you so much! it gives me more courage to keep working on it...and i'm really turning it into a song. =P

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Metro station - Seventeen Forever

We're one mistake from being together
But let's not ask why it's not right
You won't be seventeen forever
And we can get away with this tonight

i love you.
~Fresh-Eye-Candy:iconFresh-Eye-Candy: Jun 5, 2008, 4:03:05 PM
Awesome! It sounds really good so far. I really hope you finish it. Even if you don't put the finished version up, note me it.

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~chrissie-ness:iconchrissie-ness: Jun 6, 2008, 1:03:44 AM
ok -^^- =P i will :XD:

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Metro station - Seventeen Forever

We're one mistake from being together
But let's not ask why it's not right
You won't be seventeen forever
And we can get away with this tonight

i love you.
~chrissie-ness:iconchrissie-ness: Jun 6, 2008, 1:04:20 AM
thanks so much btw =P i like it too :XD: and i hope the person that i wrote this for likes it too =P

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Metro station - Seventeen Forever

We're one mistake from being together
But let's not ask why it's not right
You won't be seventeen forever
And we can get away with this tonight

i love you.
Mood: Joy ~whenthemooncriedout:iconwhenthemooncriedout: Jun 6, 2008, 1:47:16 AM
It makes my heart skip beats every minute XD hahaha. finish it so i could finally rest in peace XD kidding. the song's very touchy. haha. memories. :( awwwww finish it.O_O lol

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~chrissie-ness:iconchrissie-ness: Jun 6, 2008, 3:28:49 AM
lolz :XD: okay i will -^^- thank you so much :XD: that really means a lot to me :XD:

now i know i should REALLY finish this :XD:

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check out my cupcakes! :XD:

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Metro station - Seventeen Forever

We're one mistake from being together
But let's not ask why it's not right
You won't be seventeen forever
And we can get away with this tonight

i love you.
~Fresh-Eye-Candy:iconFresh-Eye-Candy: Jun 6, 2008, 11:15:06 AM
Me too.

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